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lou

Apr 06, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Miasma

Sensuous orb warms my skin
causing a smile.
Peaceful and sanguine

Light lingers throughout the morning.
lunchtime arrives,
life remains pleasurable.

Flat grey clouds weave
thier way and intersperse,
between the puffy white.
In a late afternoon miasma .

Night fall swallows luminous day
the moon’s distant pale,
invades .

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda , Jack Kerouac, Alan Ginsberg, D.H Lawrence, Jim Morrison's lyrics,

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Comments

14 years 3 months ago

Shirl

Thank you very much.

Love Lou

14 years 3 months ago

Lou

I love the refers to the moon and sun in this
its truly well done
Eddie C.

This stanza made me keeping reading;
"Sensuous orb warms my skin
Causing a smile
Peaceful and sanguine"

14 years 3 months ago

Eddie

Thank you, much appreciated.

Lou

14 years 3 months ago

Ian

thank you, it was a lovely weekend it was mother's day and the whole family went out for dinner.

lou

14 years 3 months ago

Xena

Thank you, I always have a problem with which words are all one word LOL !!

love lou

14 years 3 months ago

Xena

thanks

lou

14 years 3 months ago

Dear Lou,

I like your title! The poem flows well and gives off good feelings all around. I like the same lines as Eddie C. Keep up the good work!

love, Cat

14 years 3 months ago

Thanks

Cat,

Thank you very much.

Love Lou

TheUnknownAuthor

TheUnknownAuthor

14 years 2 months ago

Pleasure to meet you

And it's thanks to my fascination with the word "miasma" at the moment that I stumbled upon this. I think one may call that serendipity, which I also have a fascination with.

But anyway, and without too many words. It's astonishing how perfectly someone else can describe your emotions about a day, or particular moments in them. You do so tranquilly, and with no heavy-weighted words to change the tone from anything other than elegant.
Thank you for this.

Yours

Waldo

14 years 2 months ago

Hi Waldo

It's a pleasure to meet you as well. I love to find new words to express myself with, I'm really pleased that you enjoyed this poem.

Louise