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How does time fly

How does time fly
without any wings
no wind
no sails of cotton
nothing

yet they all say
time flies
isn't it an anomaly

even birds with broken wings can't fly
what uniqueness
God has shown me

Time flies without wings

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read , and they inspire..

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Geezer

Geezer

2 years 4 months ago

I find that...

this theme is good, but the whole of it is lost because
of a couple of things. The bales of cotton have nothing to do
with flying, and you have a double negative, in [no nothing].

You also have a typo in "even birds with broken [rings] can't fly
[What] uniqueness

You might fix the cotton bales flying by saying:
[no sails of cotton]

~ Geez.
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Geezer

Geezer

2 years 4 months ago

I love it...

Nicely done, lovedly. You have made this piece great. I detect a newness about you. Tell me I'm wrong, I dare you. ~ Geez.
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lovedly

lovedly

2 years 4 months ago

GEE

You only have given life to me how can I dare!

Geezer

Geezer

2 years 4 months ago

Nay...

I have given you nothing that you did not have. ~ Geez.
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