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Mar 04, 2023
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How does time fly
How does time fly
without any wings
no wind
no sails of cotton
nothing
yet they all say
time flies
isn't it an anomaly
even birds with broken wings can't fly
what uniqueness
God has shown me
Time flies without wings
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
2 years 4 months ago
I find that...
this theme is good, but the whole of it is lost because
of a couple of things. The bales of cotton have nothing to do
with flying, and you have a double negative, in [no nothing].
You also have a typo in "even birds with broken [rings] can't fly
[What] uniqueness
You might fix the cotton bales flying by saying:
[no sails of cotton]
~ Geez.
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lovedly
2 years 4 months ago
Howz it now
Gee
thnx
Geezer
2 years 4 months ago
I love it...
Nicely done, lovedly. You have made this piece great. I detect a newness about you. Tell me I'm wrong, I dare you. ~ Geez.
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lovedly
2 years 4 months ago
GEE
You only have given life to me how can I dare!
Geezer
2 years 4 months ago
Nay...
I have given you nothing that you did not have. ~ Geez.
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lovedly
2 years 4 months ago
Ha ha
don't ever displace...lol
lovedly
2 years 4 months ago
Thanks EK
I C u hv changed ur dress
lovedly
2 years 4 months ago
ha ha
what else can one do
lovedly
2 years 4 months ago
some say Time moves .....why fly ?
What do u have to say to that? poets