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Mar 13, 2023
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Happiness and life
Happiness is something that we seek
We find it in so many ways
Looking at an old picture
Searching through our past notes
Recounting our dreams
Tasting good food
Memories
So loved
Life
Life
We have
For many years
Filled with smiles
Loving memories
Daily kisses and hugs
Special family Dinners
New acquaintances that we meet
Create what we now call happiness
The visit
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
2 years 3 months ago
This form...
is interesting, as you go from memories in the past to memories made of the future. I think that is what you tried to achieve here. Anyway, I like the things that you have cited as memories. Nice job! ~ Geezer.
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Clentin
2 years 3 months ago
Thank you for reading and
Thank you for reading and comments. I was experimenting with the 9-1 and 1-9 syllable poem.
I was hoping to see that happiness creates life and life creates happiness.???
RoseBlack
2 years 3 months ago
Precious memories
I agree with Gee that this is an interesting form and I like your selection of memories. So many we take for granted, it is important to recognize them sooner than later. Great job!
Clentin
2 years 3 months ago
Thank you, just trying
Thank you, just trying different things.
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 3 months ago
Good job
I was also interested in the form. It really works well the way you have written this poem. Great execution on that. I agree with every word too, happiness is hard bought but it’s also easy to come by and a lot of that is in ourselves and our perspective.
Really great job
Tim
Abby
2 years 3 months ago
Love the structure here!
Love the structure here!