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A Jazz Pianist
A large, bearish man sat down
Wearing a knitted stove pipe hat
Sculptor hands size of dinner plates
Fingers straight like a karate master
Not a classical player
Piano pours forth like a poem
Flowing from a germ cell
Unrhymes and enjambments
Flowering into a bright melody
Chordal clusters gracefully smashed
A keyboard dancer with a boxer’s punch
One note can be as small as a pinhead
One note can contain the world
One note is selected from a hundred
Chosen like a perfect pearl
He left silences where others glissando
Implied more than was said
Those infinite rests and spaces
Kept us waiting in suspense
His rhythma-ning was infectious
Delicious and dissonant licks
Lifting up the bandstand
And Bemsha really did swing
Decades later, I sit here and play along
To his reflections at midnight
Why is ugly beauty so euphonious
A lovely paradox
There was only one Thelonious
About This Poem
Last Few Words: 32 lines, inspired by a musician and the piano
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Geezer
2 years 3 months ago
A great tribute...
to a bluesman of the first caliber. His unique style was what made him one of the most controversial jazz pianists of all time.
Your exquisite description of his hands and music leaves nothing to be desired here. Well done! ~Geezer.
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Sen99
2 years 3 months ago
........... Kind Words
he was one of a kind indeed, I knew there was another Monk fan on this site, cheers for reading and feedback
Lavender
2 years 3 months ago
A Jazz Pianist
I was not familiar with Thelonious Monk until the intricate description in your poem sent me to find out more. What an accurate and ardent tribute. "A keyboard dancer with a boxer's punch."
I enjoyed this!
L
Sen99
2 years 3 months ago
Keep Listening
its great to hear that my poem inspired you to discover this musician, I do hope you continue to listen thanks for reading and commenting !
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 3 months ago
Superb
You show a commanding grasp on a lot of musical concepts and they’re evident in the poem. Jazz definitely uses dissonance to full effect and when melody does present itself it surely stands out.
Excellent
Tim