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Mar 20, 2023
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"I am" (by: eddy styx)
A
FAT
round
lazy
brown.spider.sitting
sitting
SITTING
indolently on my web
patiently
weaving
A
sticky thread
of
Cotton~Candy~Words
About This Poem
Last Few Words: this poem was written by my Male alter ego who writes on the darker side of life.
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 3 months ago
Hi Eddy
Astounding imagery. Makes me think of Anansi stories. But knowing your style I’m thinking this is quite terrifyingly murderous in intention.
Great timing,
Tim
Candlewitch
2 years 3 months ago
hey Tim!!!
it is nice to see you! thanks for the read, am I that transparent? lol!
*ever, eddy
Jackweb
2 years 3 months ago
Wow!
Apt, yet, packed with great imagery. Indeed, poets are silent weavers in time of creativity.
Nice one!
.
Candlewitch
2 years 3 months ago
thankd much, O.
I appreciate your comment and you!
*ever, eddy
RoseBlack
2 years 3 months ago
I really like this
Made me think of Kipling's "Just So Stories." I can see the brown spider just patiently weaving his/her web. Great imagery and use of language.
Candlewitch
2 years 3 months ago
dear Carrie,
thank you for telling me.
*ever, eddy