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Blue-eyed Bolla
Blue-eyed Bolla
Mar 20, 2023 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Passion Flower

She is my pretty passion flower,
my rare, romantic rose.
So, I’ll not pluck her thoughtlessly
from the garden where she grows.

Instead, I’ll simply idolise,
appreciate and praise,
sit still and simply study her
on those still September days.

She is my pretty passion flower,
my lotus in the mire.
She will not take offence at me
If I sometimes seem to tire.

I know that she won’t hold a grudge,
fall out with me or weep.
She’ll go on being beautiful
while her slave is sound asleep.

And when I wake, refreshed once more,
she’ll still sit there serene.
My mild, majestic passion flower:
she’s my faithful, floral queen!

About This Poem

Last Few Words: dedicated to my darling wife, Lorraine

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Buxton, Derbyshire., GBR

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Comments

Mr joghe

Mr joghe

2 years 4 months ago

Dear poet

The title is okay with me. The imagery and use of language are good.
The theme of your poem appeals to beauty.

Fear not to ride on a rough road!

Geezer

Geezer

2 years 4 months ago

What woman...

could resist a passionate poem such as this? She must indeed, be a rare and beautiful flower to elicit such praise.
The title is okay, [I imagine that it has been used at least a few times before]. Your language use is good, and it tells the tale of a beautiful flower to be admired. The rhythm and pace are great, and the theme is well-worn, but not hopelessly out of place.
It begins well and runs smoothly to the logical end. Nice job! ~ Geezer.
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Blue-eyed Bolla

Blue-eyed Bolla

2 years 4 months ago

Well-worn theme

Yeah, thank you, Geezer. Gotta agree with you about the well-worn theme thing. At the touch of love everyone turns into a poet. Lol. Again, many thanks for your insightful comments.

Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 4 months ago

I love it!

All fantastic. I have one suggestion and that is replace “slave” with “thrall”. It might shed some negative connotation which I’m sure you’re not going for.

Pretty perfect,
Tim