Lexicon (Complete Revision of Colloquial)

Contortion of a warped treain of thought,
vocabulary articulated with diction,
colloquial argot.

Lexicon of the abstract and abstruse,
conception of an illusion.
Manipulating consciousness.

Vociferous articulating of intense emotion,
or inaudible machinations of a warped mind.
Halcyon conversation.

Language is my passion

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda , Jack Kerouac, Alan Ginsberg, D.H Lawrence, Jim Morrison's lyrics,

Comments

Race_9togo

14 years 3 months ago

Hi Lou,

I like this one a lot.
Imo, if you could lose as many of the conjunctions as you can, perhaps replacing them with punctuation, this would really tighten things up, and help your little piece give that swift rap on readers' heads, heehee.
I would incluse one cuss, perhaps your favorite swear word, in the end lines as well: that would have great impact.

lou

14 years 3 months ago

Jim

Thank you that's a great help

Love Lou

scribbler

14 years 3 months ago

greetings

kept rereading to find what seemed missing. I think it may be in last stanza. With rest of poem portraying different sides maybe something like :
One swear word can say more
than one thousand words
and one word of beauty
more than a myriad curses
ever can
Imo this might be the balance that seemed lacking .....................stan PS almost forgot to say I think this one of your best I've read