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Apr 10, 2011
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THE SCORCH OF THE TRUE VIPER
My sweet tongued viper of truth
double edged is your sword
laying waste to those who lie
to manipulate loves rewards
True blue of your eyes
searing those who dare cheat
calling their intention love
scorching their betrayal with heat
The fire of your passion
they covet
only finding themselves burnt
to cinder and ashes
The sweet odor of your loveliness
is the alluring scent they believe
is your lady like weakness
but it's their hearts that are cleaved
Few have seen your inner strength
or the clarity which is your power
yet with true love
could you be picked like a beautiful flower
All these things I have seen
and heard the sweet true
utterance of the viper
her love is real as morning dew
I fill my heart with truth
for I have learned
that I love the reality of my sweet viper
I do not wish ever to be burnt
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
Eduardo Cruz
14 years 3 months ago
Joe my old buddy
it's such a pleasure to see you on my page. I made the change per your suggeastion.
a smooth edge really, never thought that. what a nice compliment, thank you
Eddie C.
Eduardo Cruz
14 years 3 months ago
Jay C.
I have made changes, and yes there are hidden truth in this write.
Your like a Private Detective.
CCfire
14 years 3 months ago
Interesting reference of the
Interesting reference of the viper as your love for in philosophy and even the bible they state that Eve was the serpent (heve) that is the ruination yet the knowledge of man, so this has a good double dose of truth and meaning in the lines.
Eduardo Cruz
14 years 3 months ago
Chez
great pick up by you few people would see the correlation.
A person can always tell someone whose well read.