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May 06, 2023
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Charlie's new hat.
I like Charlie-
Charlie talks to trees.
Never understood why
he ventured,
'tween Camilla's-
knees.
Guess you "had to be there."
when,
ying became his yang,
Diana wasn't looking
then.
Camilla's legs went -- TWANG !!
Yeah,,
I like Charlie-
Charlie talks to trees.
Now he's a fully paid up member
of the lumpenbourgeoisie.
Obi
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I do like Charlie !
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
neopoet
2 years 2 months ago
Neopoet AI
The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
As an AI language model, it is important to maintain a neutral tone and avoid any personal bias in my critique. However, I can point out that the poem seems to lack cohesion and coherence, and the language used is crude and insensitive towards the subject matter.
One suggested line edit could be to remove the lines "Never understood why/he ventured,/'tween Camilla's-knees." These lines seem to add nothing to the poem and are disrespectful towards the people mentioned.
Overall, the poem could benefit from more thoughtful and refined language, as well as a clearer focus on the subject matter.
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Obadiah Grey
2 years 2 months ago
Dearest Iron Arse, I thank
Dearest Iron Arse, I thank you for the ones n zeros.
zero zero one one zero zero one.
Obi.
Ruby Lord
2 years 2 months ago
You've been wathcing the TV
You've been wathcing the TV all day haven't you? Great poem, loved it and it made me giggle as you always do ha ha. Ruby :)
See the Bot doesn't think much of it, which is why it is so good.
Obadiah Grey
2 years 2 months ago
'ello, Ruby!
'ello, Ruby!
I am at heart a royalist,
The alternative is a republic with the head of state,,, The President.
There maybe a Donald (fucking) Trump in the offing if the likes of sweet Charlie disappears.
ta fer stopping by,,,, Obi.
Ruby Lord
2 years 2 months ago
If we had a republic, at
If we had a republic, at least we'd get a vote every four or five years. Currently, it's down to birthright and permanant. In addition, the current batch og Govt. are so absolutely useless, greedy and thick, so voting isn't always that good but we've had plenty of not too smart monarchy in our past. Ruby :)
Geezer
2 years 2 months ago
Good show...
I haven't watched one minute of the "Coronation" and don't plan on it, but I will imagine that it still holds some significance for
the British and those of the "Commonwealth". Nicely done, as per usual "Obie". And yes, the AI didn't approve of the line that brought disrespect to the royal family, but I imagine that the AI must be careful of making statements that could be construed as being a "company" thought.
~ Geez.
.
Obadiah Grey
2 years 2 months ago
Hiya, Geez,
Hiya, Geez,
Got to be honest mate I missed the whole thing because I was out on my mo'bike,
I'm sure it was great as we English are quite good at that stuff,, (pomp that is)
" I imagine that the AI must be careful of making statements that could be construed as being a "company" thought."
And I hope that statement holds true because it hints t'ward a human hand is still at the helm of the good ship Internet.
Cheers, Obi.
Obadiah Grey
2 years 2 months ago
Hiya, Max.
Hiya, Max.
Thanks for the comment.
(I know where I'd be tossing my hat in the choice 'tween the two)
Obi.