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Alex Tanner
Alex Tanner
May 25, 2023 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
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Dark Angel 5

Enfold me dark Angel, Enfold me,
With your Black Satin Wings draw me near,
Draw me close to your soft swollen bosom,
Draw me far from life and its fears.

Embrace me dark Angel, Embrace me,
Keep me safe in the coldness of love,
Let my mind sink to the abyss
To be held as if in silk glove.

Teach me dark Angel, teach me,
You know that to you I am true.
Though you give yourself freely to others
None will be faithful to you.

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Country/Region: Isle of Wight United Kingdom

Favorite Poets: Poe, Swinburn, Bob Dylan, Spike Milligan, Alfred Noyes, Kipling., Many Others.

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neopoet

neopoet

2 years 1 month ago

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Ruby Lord

Ruby Lord

2 years 1 month ago

Your poem gave me the shivers

Your poem gave me the shivers. If that was your intention, well done, scary.
I enjoyed your use of metaphor and illiteration, both delivered in brevity.
A familiar subject matter given a modern day twist, well done. Ruby :)

Alex Tanner

Alex Tanner

2 years 1 month ago

Not quite

Hello Ruby. That was not the original intention, I just wanted something dark. Still I am very pleased with the effect. Alex

Alex Tanner

Alex Tanner

2 years 1 month ago

Thank you Jes,

Thank you Jes. I have just read a couple of your works. I enjoyed them. It will be interesting to see how you develop. Alex

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

2 years ago

dear Alex,

you set the hook with your first line and its repetition. exquisitely haunting... the undercurrent of sorrow is delicious. there is a note of yearning that intensifies to the end of this piece. poignant, walking the razors edge of pain and pleasure that is devotion. thank you for this write. and congratulations to you.

* best wishes, Cat

Alex Tanner

Alex Tanner

2 years ago

Dark Angel

Thank you Tiffany, so glad you liked it. I like to write (or try ) about the power women can exert over the weaker of the species. There are several Dark Angel poems and more to come. Alex.

Unca Fez

Unca Fez

2 years ago

Nicely Done!

My first read of the poem brought forth the memory of "Phantom of the Opera", but subsequent readings showed me there was more to it than that. Your "dark Angel" is a powerful figure, yet, somehow, seems to be made the victim by almost all. I'm still digesting this one. I really like a poem that takes me a while to work through all the nuances.

Alex Tanner

Alex Tanner

2 years ago

Thank You

Thank you Steve, It's always good when someone appreciates one's efforts. Alex

Tigger Kaz

Tigger Kaz

2 years ago

Gothic feel

Loved the gothic feel to your well crafted poem.
And as has been already said, the poem sends shivers down one's spine when reading it.

Alex Tanner

Alex Tanner

2 years ago

Dark Angel

Hello Kaz, thank you always good to hear reactions. That was number 5 of several that i have written that I call Dark Angel. I'll put them up from time to time. Alex

Leslie

Leslie

1 year 7 months ago

Dark Angel 5

This took me back to embryo where all is dark
and fear is veiled. Then into early childhood.
Amazing, amazing enveloping!

Leslie

Leslie

1 year 7 months ago

Dark Angel 5

This took me back to embryo where all is dark
and fear is veiled. Then into early childhood.
Amazing, amazing enveloping!

Alaethia D

Alaethia D

1 year 3 months ago

Cold

"Keep me safe in the coldness of love"
This phrase gave me a pause, and I sat to consider it for a while. What a fascinating contrast to illustrate an embrace, and then call love cold!

Alex Tanner

Alex Tanner

1 year 3 months ago

Thank You

Thank you Alaethia for your comments on my efforts. I will not respond to all except to repeat. Thank you so much. Alex

Alex Tanner

Alex Tanner

1 year 3 months ago

Thank You

Thank you Mark, always gratifying to receive compliments. Alex.