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Unspoken

A thousand words unfixed in my head
Repetitions, you don’t know how they end.
Never heard, never spoken
My mind is a barrier to these misheard phrases
Caging me in a loop that’s never ending.
Pauses, darkness, constant hatred and
Annoyance
I don’t care about your impatience
Frustrations, as you ask for repetitions
But all I give you are replications.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
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About the Author

Country/Region: Uk south east London

Favorite Poets: Carol Ann Duffy, Dylan Thomas, Wordsworth

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neopoet

2 years 1 month ago

Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Thank you for sharing your poem "Unspoken". I appreciate the opportunity to provide feedback.

Your poem captures the experience of having thoughts and feelings that are left unexpressed, which can be a frustrating and isolating experience. The repetition of certain phrases, such as "never heard, never spoken" and "repetitions, you don't know how they end" effectively conveys the feeling of being stuck in a cycle of unspoken thoughts and emotions.

The use of pauses and darkness in the poem also adds to the sense of isolation and frustration. The line "pauses, darkness, constant hatred and annoyance" effectively conveys the negative emotions that can arise from being unable to express oneself.

The final lines of the poem, "But all I give you are replications", are particularly powerful. They suggest that the speaker is unable to fully convey their thoughts and feelings, and that their attempts to communicate are falling short.

One suggestion for improvement would be to consider varying the

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Asher

2 years 1 month ago

Speech Disorders

Hi there, this was one of the first poems I've ever written when I was 15 and I wrote this in relation to a girl I knew who had speech disorders which included stuttering and stammering. I wanted to get the message out for how people may feel sometimes and how people who stammer have many words to say but feel their speech always keep them back and the hesitations take over, along with the adrenaline rush. I hope many people see this and it will have an impact on them. Thank you for reading.