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Alan Garfoot
Alan Garfoot
Jul 21, 2023 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
This poem is part of the challenge:

July 2023 Challenge Once upon a time

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The Day We Were Born

With an ancient power,
This day you were born,
On that exact minute and hour,
Our undying affection was sworn.

With a cry of the purest emotion,
You came into this life,
And tears fell into the ocean,
Of a fate you were destined twice.

And the heavens slowly opened up,
As the perfect miracle descended,
There are no words to accurately put,
How high our spirits ascended.

Then the shared hopes of our soul,
Became one as they intertwined,
Becoming part of the unique whole,
Of a person so perfect and divine.

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

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Region, Country: England, UK

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Geezer

Geezer

1 year 11 months ago

I'm thinking...

This kind of sounds like the birth of a child.
A prayer from Mom and Dad.
Be interesting to see what you really intended. ~ Geezer.
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