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Jul 24, 2023
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" Aberfan"
Aberfan.
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----------angle of repose.
---------------------------wishing
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-------------------------------------------wishing;
--------------------------------------------------children wore Sunday clothes.
Obi.
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neopoet
1 year 12 months ago
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Geezer
1 year 12 months ago
What a...
remarkable piece of formatting! Not sure of the meaning of wishing that children wore Sunday clothes.
~ Geez.
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Obadiah Grey
1 year 12 months ago
Hiya, Geez.
Hiya, Geez.
Easiest way to understand the meaning is to Google,,,, Aberfan. Mate...
Cheers, Obi.
Geezer
1 year 12 months ago
I get it now...
Had they been in Sunday clothes, they might have been home or at church. ~ Geez.
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Triskelion
1 year 11 months ago
Need to..
..agree with Geezer, the formatting is an eye-catcher. Just read a bit on the event. Tragic in the least...can't even imagine the horror. That's all I got on that...hmm.. and I always thought you were shallow.
Cheers!
Thomas
Lavender
1 year 12 months ago
Aberfan
Well done, Obi.
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Ruby Lord
1 year 12 months ago
Oh, Obi, I don't what to say
Oh, Obi, I don't know what to say but this?
It was fantastic because of its simplicity and its representation on the screen/paper.
I don't remember the incident but I have learned of it and seen lots of footage and pictures.
Heartbreaking incident. You're one clever bloke and not as sombre as I supposed.
Well done brilliant yet devastating. Ruby ;) xx
Alex Tanner
1 year 11 months ago
aberfan
How well I remember that awful day. Beautifully put Obi, if beautiful can be used to describe such horrifying events. Alex
Obadiah Grey
1 year 11 months ago
Geez, Thomas, Lav, Ruby, Alex
Geez, Thomas, Lav, Ruby, Alex.
I like and admire the formatting too.
If I'm honest with myself, the content does not do justice to the deed so to speak,
and, I feel its sadly lacking poetic clout.
Thanks for the comments chaps,,, Its well received.
Obi
Lavender
1 year 11 months ago
Obi,
I can only tell you how it made (makes) me feel. Great poetry, and so well done.
L
Ruby Lord
1 year 11 months ago
Like others I can only say
Like others I can only say how it made me feel. To create that emotion on paper, the poet must get it right. You did. Ruby :)
Triskelion
1 year 11 months ago
Well....
it can be a sensitive subject, depending on the person's relationship with the event...didn't want to go there with you, so there it is. It's the simplicity of your piece that leaves a lot open (speaking as a life-worn individual)...like I said...I doubt any poet could do the event justice.
Cheers, Obi.
Thomas
Triskelion
1 year 11 months ago
I guess I should add
...I commend you for not trying to get into specifics of the tragedy.
Thomas
Ruby Lord
1 year 9 months ago
Hi Obi, today is the 57th
Hi Obi, today is the 57th anniversary of Aberfan. Ruby :)
Leslie
1 year 5 months ago
Obi...
Sounds like somebody died? Is this true, or no?
Words Ablaze
9 months 3 weeks ago
Weird style. But I like it.
Weird style. But I like it.
Leslie
9 months 3 weeks ago
Obi
I googled this and now I definately understand. Sorry that I was so ignorant as not to read about this horrible experience before I made my first repy!
Candlewitch
9 months 3 weeks ago
Dear Obi,
I googled Aberfan, too! Such devastation! Great presentation!
*hugs, Cat