Wasn't It A Lovely Rain?

It cooled the scarlet rosebud
soothed the lonely path

danced among the lily pods
gathered with the grass

bellowed above tin rooftops
perched with maple leaves

skipped along the river bank
paused beneath the trees

sang softly to the sidewalk
splashed in shallow mud

then, with one small breath, faded
silently into the sun

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Methinks the rhyme is much too loose to be considered Western.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: I tend to read Ted Kooser, Jim Harrison, Billy Collins, Paul Simon, Robert Frost. I like minimalist poetry, and poems reflecting on nature and Mother Earth.

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Comments

Ruby Lord

1 year 11 months ago

Wasn't It A Lovely Rain?

Ooooh this was lovely. I liked the way it flowed as if your words were rain. Fantastic peom I could feel every object the rain touched, beautiful, Ruby :)

Lavender

1 year 11 months ago

Hi, Ruby,

The rain was so peaceful. Even writing about it made me feel at peace.
Thank you for reading and sharing!
Lx

Michael Anthony

1 year 11 months ago

Loved this L! Makes me look

Loved this L! Makes me look forward to the next bit of rain to see what I see - beautiful!

Best

Lavender

1 year 11 months ago

Hi, Michael,

We adore the sweet moments as they come, don't we?
Thank you for reading! I'm tickled that you enjoyed this one!
L

Geezer

1 year 11 months ago

Great stuff!

This one has all the right qualities to make it a solid poem. there is rhyme and near rhyme and it flows very well. Nicely done! ~ Geez.
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Lavender

1 year 11 months ago

Hello, Geezer,

It was lovely, lovely, lovely. And even more lovely. A soft, gentle but steady rain.
Thank you so much for reading and sharing your thoughts!
L