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Conversing With A Vending Machine
We haven't spoken for
a while,
I see you haven't changed much.
You with your cloying carbohydrates
dangling
in pernicious wrappings
like chocolate kisses
whispering
sweet nothings
to palates
too smitten
to walk away.
You woo everyone,
don't you,
with fleeting pleasure.
The hungry, the thirsty,
the anxious, and the bored,
promising fulfillment,
contentment,
even
merciful friendship.
But we both know
you stand a bit
taller,
don't you,
when they bow down
to your dishonorable
enticements.
Someone should pull your
dirty, little plug,
hang a
"Danger - Highly Toxic" sign
on your greasy, sly face
with a petition that screams,
"Gimme back my life, ya filthy animal!"
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Triskelion
1 year 10 months ago
You have...
...a real talent for taking the ordinary and revving it up with an awesome use of vocabulary. This is a playful portrait of confronting a self's weaknesses and taking it out on an inanimate object. The personification is classic.
Thomas
Lavender
1 year 10 months ago
Hello, Thomas,
Sometimes I feel it carries a bit more depth to write TO something, rather than ABOUT something. I really enjoy personifying.
Thank you so much for reading!
L
Triskelion
1 year 10 months ago
Yes..
...it is certainly more personable. hmm..life is but a vending machine...I wonder.
Thomas
Clentin
1 year 10 months ago
You have identified the
You have identified the essence of vending machines and their place in our lives- not always for the bearer!
Good job,
Lavender
1 year 10 months ago
Hello, Clentin,
Vending machines - ugh...
Thank you for reading!
L
paul Bartoswicz
1 year 10 months ago
Takes me back
Takes me back to my days in the Navy, where many meals came from vending machines, how I hated them but loved them at the same time, grabbing a quick meal at the military airlift command (MAC) while crisscrossing the country.
Lavender
1 year 10 months ago
Hello, Paul,
I can understand Navy vending machines, and why you both hated and loved them. Makes more sense. I visited a hospital and saw a vending machine full of "stuff" contrary to healing. Frustrating...
Thank you for reading!
L