Dreams

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem titled "Dreams" presents an interesting exploration of the human mind and the emotional impact of dreams. However, there are areas where the poem could be improved to enhance its overall impact and clarity.

1. Imagery: The poem could benefit from more vivid and specific imagery. Instead of stating "A variety of thoughts," consider describing the specific thoughts or dreams that are bouncing around the brain. This could provide a more engaging and immersive experience for the reader.

2. Emotion: The line "Making me feel good, bad, lonely or sad" could be more effectively expressed by showing these emotions through the content of the dreams rather than directly stating them. This would allow the reader to feel the emotions along with the speaker, rather than being told how the speaker feels.

3. Structure: The structure of the poem is quite simple, which can work well for certain themes. However, for a complex subject like dreams, a more complex structure might better reflect the content. Consider experimenting with different line lengths, stanza structures, or rhythmic patterns.

4. Word Choice: The word "Illusions" at the end of the poem seems to be intended as a punchline or conclusion. However, it's not clear how it relates to the rest of the poem. Consider choosing a word or phrase that more clearly ties back to the content of the poem.

5. Punctuation: The lack of space after the comma in "good, bad,lonely or sad" is a minor typographical error that should be corrected for readability.

By addressing these points, the poem could offer a more engaging and emotionally resonant exploration of the theme of dreams.

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of how to classify this one, but I will admit to being impressed with your efforts. You have made significant improvements in your work. I have always been intrigued with dreams and what they mean. I think that they are an internal dialog between your conscious and subconscious. I think that the subconscious, sends dreams to help with problems or acknowledgement
of things to your conscious part. Anyway, keep writing. ~ Geez.
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Hello, Clentin,
Although the syllable count is not the same, the form reminds me of a cinquain. I love dreams - mine are absolutely bizarre. (And quite fun.) I tend to agree with AI regarding showing the reader instead of telling. I'd love to know what types of illusions: floating, laughing, running, rainbows, sparkles, cotton candy, loud noises, eerie silence, what may have caused a surprise, a laugh, a scream. Maybe write a poem about a specific dream instead of plural, that way you can go into finer detail.
Thank you!
L