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Sep 26, 2023
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We Are
The great sky
will sweep above us
reuniting our brief time
of what we have been
with what we will always be:
mud and ivy
oak and leopard
cloud and fire ant
rose and lava
ocean and hornet
cypress and fossil
canyon and hummingbird
wind and orca
oil and stone
dust and dandelion
eagle and chestnut
bone and mountain
lightening and riverbed
wood and air
tsunami and poppy field.
We are
knitted
elements of
chaos and balance.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Ruby Lord
1 year 9 months ago
I love the varied elements
I love the varied elements within your poem. They create vivid images that I would not normally put together but it works. I enjoyed your poem and I think the changes you made to it have enhanced it in terms of meaning and flow. The natural and physical elements used in your words cause the reader to imagine the contrasts as questions. Well done, Ruby :) xx
Lavender
1 year 9 months ago
Hello, Ruby,
Definitely test-driving this one. Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts!
L