Weighing Silence

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Thank you for sharing your poem, "Weighing Silence." I appreciate the introspective tone and the exploration of feeling overlooked and ignored. Here are some suggestions to further develop your poem:

1. Expand on the feeling of having your mouth sewn shut or lacking the capacity to speak. You could describe the physical sensation or use vivid imagery to convey the weight of silence. This will help the reader better understand your perspective and empathize with your experience.

2. Consider adding specific examples or situations where you have felt overlooked or ignored. This will add depth and make your poem more relatable. By providing concrete instances, you can create a stronger emotional connection with your readers.

3. Explore the reasons behind your tiredness and reluctance to change. Is it due to fear, resignation, or a sense of futility? Elaborating on these feelings will give your poem more complexity and provide insight into your mindset.

4. Experiment with the structure and rhythm of your poem. Currently, it consists of

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shows strongly here. I agree with the AI about maybe giving a little bit more reason for the emotional resignation, it never hurts to tell about why. Good start for your first piece. ~ Welcome to Neo. ~ Geezer.
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I think you'll find it's "sewn" not "sown"!

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