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Apr 19, 2011
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abstract beauty
with slits for eyes he peers inside
those dusty corners in his mind
until he sees with certainty
the depths of his humanity
now laying there disheveled on the floor
remembrances of hoops and hurdles
leave sour tastes, like milk that curdles
and though he doesn't know it yet
this is a day he'll not forget
for it will be unlike those gone before
in brilliant beacons light explodes
that leads upon Damascus road
to light the path and guide the feet
until the day when souls shall meet
and we shall greet the one whom we adore
for those with eyes now blind to see
such treasures "their's" shall never be
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
Comments
lou
14 years 3 months ago
Hi
I love the imagery in this poem.
lou
scribbler
14 years 3 months ago
hello
well executed sonnet with great imagery . Only alternative I have to offer is in L-12 you might change and to then...............scribbler
hillrider
14 years 3 months ago
thanks everyone
Scribbler , I don't believe this is a sonnet - wrong format
raj
14 years 3 months ago
Hillrider
the glimmer of sunshine on icicles
Bonitaj
14 years ago
Hillrider!
I don't know the format - but I like the message!
Nice write!
Boni
TheUnknownAuthor
14 years ago
Pleasure to meet you
And though I don't care much for format, this is a beautifully constructed poem. The scenes captured me. The message made me smile. And I do hope to read more of you soon:)
Yours
Waldo
hillrider
14 years ago
Bonitaj
Not sure what format this would actually be yet the write is indicative of an enlightening. Needn't have spiritual overtones except those that a discovery allows. Believing is a situational experience that changes with learning...faith is blind...awakening to see the light can be daunting. Even for those already aware of the significance ...Indi
hillrider
14 years ago
Waldo
Thanks...such encouragement may actually provoke a new post...Indi