Ruby Lord

Dec 26, 2023 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

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MAKE ME LAUGH

Start with a smile,
And tell me a joke,
make me laugh,
my funny bloke.

Tell me again
fill life with fun
reel them off quick
until I am done.

Laughing my socks off
take to the stage
honing your humour
my comedian sage.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: This is what gets me through the day, laughing. It's always good to have a laugh, even better if the person makes you laugh because they know you'll spend your day with a smile and a memory. Ruby :) xx

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United Kingdom

Favorite Poets: Margaret Atwood is one of my favourite writers. Carol Ann Duffy, Philip Larkin, Ted Hughes, Wendy Cope and more.

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neopoet

1 year 6 months ago

Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "MAKE ME LAUGH" demonstrates a clear structure and rhythm, which is commendable. The use of rhymes in each stanza provides a sense of cohesion and continuity throughout the piece.

However, the poem could benefit from a more varied vocabulary. The use of common phrases such as "laughing my socks off" and "tell me a joke" can make the poem feel somewhat predictable. Experimenting with more unique or unexpected language could add a layer of intrigue and depth to the piece.

Additionally, the poem could explore more deeply the relationship between the speaker and the "funny bloke." As it stands, the reader is left with a somewhat superficial understanding of their dynamic. Delving into this relationship more could provide an emotional weight to the poem, making it more engaging for the reader.

Lastly, the poem could benefit from more descriptive language. The current language is quite direct and literal, which can limit the reader's imagination. By incorporating more metaphorical or symbolic language, the poem could evoke a stronger emotional response from the reader.

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Michael Anthony

1 year 6 months ago

Enjoyed this Ruby! Could not

Enjoyed this Ruby! Could not agree more about laughter. t's always been my constant and familiar companion. Thanks for sharing this.

Best

Ruby Lord

1 year 6 months ago

Thank you for reading and

Thank you for reading and commenting. I don't know if it's the holiday feeling but my husband has been very funy for the past few weeks, I mean funnier than usual and without trying, I think. Much appreciate your comments and yes, I love to laugh at every opportunity. Ruby :) xx

Geezer

1 year 6 months ago

This...

makes me smile. My sister always says, "Grab a laugh." I'm sure that my smile will get me further down the road to a laugh.
Thank you. ~ Geez.
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Ruby Lord

1 year 6 months ago

My husband says loads of fun

My husband says loads of fun stuff to me. One of my favourites is as follows:

Are you happy?
Yes, why?
I wish you'd tell your face.

He says it in the way a real mancunian would. Ruby :) xx

Michael Anthony

1 year 6 months ago

Love it!

Ruby Lord

1 year 6 months ago

Thank you, he's always making

Thank you, he's always making me laugh :) xx

Candlewitch

1 year 6 months ago

Dear Ruby,

I love it!!!
Steven and I make the other laugh. I think it is the secret of our marriage. That... and we listen, and say thank you when we do things for the other. it sounds like you have a great marriage, too!

*love, Cat

Ruby Lord

1 year 6 months ago

Hi Cat, thank you for your

Hi Cat, thank you for your read and comments. Yes, it's great to be appreciated and feel you self appreciated for all the things you do. Ruby :) xx

Unca Fez

1 year 6 months ago

Laughter Makes The Day

Laughter makes the day, so I always appreciate a good laugh. Cat's sense of humor is just about as warped as mine is, which is one of the reasons why, in 42 years, we have managed to not kill each other. ;)

A really good read that reminds us of a simple remedy to doom and gloom.

Ruby Lord

1 year 6 months ago

Hi Steve, thank you for your

Hi Steve, thank you for your read and comments. I wanted to do something straightforward and simple this time. Ruby :) xx

William Lynn

1 year 4 months ago

Hello Ruby.

Sorry to be so late in commenting. Somehow I missed the poem and just tonight found it.

Let the laughter begin. My friends often comment on what I find funny but if they only knew I find humor everyday where others may not. Laughter is the opposite crying, and I will choose laughter whenever I can. Thanks! - Will

Ruby Lord

1 year 4 months ago

Hi William, no worries. I

Hi William, no worries. I like laughing, I'm sure we all do and like you, I find my humour is not always the same as others. Maybe that's why laughing is so good for us?
Have a great Sunday, make sure it is full of laughter and giggles. Ruby :) xx

Leslie

1 month 1 week ago

RUBY,

THE WARMTH OF LAUGHTER IS OF UNESTIMABLE WORTH IT WARMS OUR SOULS AND BRINGS US TOGETHER SOMETHING THAT FEW OTHER THINGS DO. WHAT A GREAT POEM. I AM HAPPY FOR YOUR HAPPINESS!!!