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Jan 26, 2024
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Already Old
Over coffee that morning
we both smiled. Remembering
when we first met
we were both already old.
But we were free
from the awkwardness
of first encounters with love.
At the time, we didn't know
we would share in the sun
the rest of our shadows together.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
scribbler
1 year 5 months ago
"sharing shadows" the best phrase I've read in a year
or maybe more lol
Michael Anthony
1 year 5 months ago
Thank you Scrib! Best
Thank you Scrib!
Best
Lavender
1 year 5 months ago
Already Old
Hello, Michael,
I agree with Stan - that line is great.
L
Michael Anthony
1 year 5 months ago
LOL! I liked it too L - thank
LOL! I liked it too L - thank you!
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Lavender
1 year 5 months ago
Hello, Michael,
Sometimes I get excited and go on and on about a poem that I really love. I wanted to offer how "shadows" feels to me here. Not only the shadows of the golden years, but it also feels like it's reflecting on their individual experiences being peacefully left in the past. Anyhoo...
Thank you!
L
Michael Anthony
1 year 5 months ago
Very kind L! Your comments
Very kind L! Your comments are exactly what I was trying to convey - thank you for sharing!
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Candlewitch
1 year 5 months ago
and I agree...
with all of the above!
*hugs, Cat
Michael Anthony
1 year 5 months ago
Appreciate the visit Cat -
Appreciate the visit Cat - thank you!
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Tawny023
1 year 5 months ago
Really nice
A very cool perspective of sharing it all in love
Michael Anthony
1 year 5 months ago
Thanks for stopping by Tawny,
Thanks for stopping by Tawny, and glad you liked the piece!
Best
Ruby Lord
1 year 5 months ago
This has a gentle and lovely
This has a gentle and lovely feel about it. An enjoyable and thought provoking poem that I read more than a few times. I applied it to myself as a younger person and read it again as an older one. Your words made me look to my past and my present. Well done, Ruby :)