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Already Old

Over coffee that morning
we both smiled. Remembering
when we first met
we were both already old.

But we were free
from the awkwardness
of first encounters with love.

At the time, we didn't know
we would share in the sun
the rest of our shadows together.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski, Billy Collins, Ted Kooser, Haiku & Harvey Kurtzman (a visual poet, of sorts)

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Lavender

Lavender

1 year 5 months ago

Already Old

Hello, Michael,
I agree with Stan - that line is great.
L

Lavender

Lavender

1 year 5 months ago

Hello, Michael,

Sometimes I get excited and go on and on about a poem that I really love. I wanted to offer how "shadows" feels to me here. Not only the shadows of the golden years, but it also feels like it's reflecting on their individual experiences being peacefully left in the past. Anyhoo...
Thank you!
L

Ruby Lord

Ruby Lord

1 year 5 months ago

This has a gentle and lovely

This has a gentle and lovely feel about it. An enjoyable and thought provoking poem that I read more than a few times. I applied it to myself as a younger person and read it again as an older one. Your words made me look to my past and my present. Well done, Ruby :)