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Teenage Boys Looking for Religion

Listening to records with my roommate
that summer. We were very young then.
We talked about the girl. The one we met
at the western shore but didn’t get her name.

We watched, furtively, every one
of her eccentric and mystical movements,
and the dueling colors in her eyes.
All of it imperfectly perfect.

Later, while putting on another LP,
he said, “If the way she looked
didn’t take you to church
then God doesn’t need you.”

“I don’t know about God”, I said,
remembering how she swayed this way and that,
“But if church felt like that I’d go more often.”

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Remembering those far away days....

Style/Type: Free verse

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Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski, Billy Collins, Ted Kooser, Haiku & Harvey Kurtzman (a visual poet, of sorts)

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MermaidMaster

1 year 5 months ago

Hi Michael!

Hi Michael!
This poem is so delightful! Ive got a huge grin too.
WELL DONE
-MM

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scribbler

1 year 5 months ago

Hello

This took me all the way back to 1969 when my brother and a classmate of his camped out all night next to the lake on their graduation night. I was the only one who remained sober lol. We talked of girls, and the everything which is nothing. Thank you