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Teenage Boys Looking for Religion
Listening to records with my roommate
that summer. We were very young then.
We talked about the girl. The one we met
at the western shore but didn’t get her name.
We watched, furtively, every one
of her eccentric and mystical movements,
and the dueling colors in her eyes.
All of it imperfectly perfect.
Later, while putting on another LP,
he said, “If the way she looked
didn’t take you to church
then God doesn’t need you.”
“I don’t know about God”, I said,
remembering how she swayed this way and that,
“But if church felt like that I’d go more often.”
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Remembering those far away days....
Style/Type: Free verse
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Comments
Lavender
1 year 5 months ago
Teenage Boys Looking for Religion
Hello, Michael,
I'm wearing a huge grin! Well done!
L
Michael Anthony
1 year 5 months ago
Thank you L! This happened so
Thank you L! This happened so long ago, but it still makes me laugh.
Best
MermaidMaster
1 year 5 months ago
Hi Michael!
Hi Michael!
This poem is so delightful! Ive got a huge grin too.
WELL DONE
-MM
Michael Anthony
1 year 5 months ago
Thanks MM - mission
Thanks MM - mission accomplished then!
Cheers
scribbler
1 year 5 months ago
Hello
This took me all the way back to 1969 when my brother and a classmate of his camped out all night next to the lake on their graduation night. I was the only one who remained sober lol. We talked of girls, and the everything which is nothing. Thank you