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Michael Anthony
Michael Anthony
Feb 20, 2024 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Target Practice

I was with a woman
some time ago, who wore her love
like a pistol on her hip.

With her suspicious heart for ammunition,
one inevitable wrong move by me
and I was going to be done for.

Pretty soon I stopped
trying to avoid her aim.
She had already put holes
where we needed to breathe.

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Style/Type: Free verse

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Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski, Billy Collins, Ted Kooser, Haiku & Harvey Kurtzman (a visual poet, of sorts)

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MermaidMaster

1 year 5 months ago

you’ve done it again!! Every

you’ve done it again!! Every poem I’ve read is far of yours has me transfixed. I love the metaphor you used here!
my favorite line is:
wore her love
like a pistol on her hip.
Thank you for sharing!
-MM

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

1 year 5 months ago

Dear Michael,

That is one smokin' Hot woman!!! keep her in front of you, let her take the lead, lol!

*hugs, Cat
*ever, eddy

Geezer

Geezer

1 year 5 months ago

So nice of her...

Yeah, they don't aim for killing shots or specific targets, they just squeeze off a few rounds ever so often, in the general vicinity of anything they think might be a threat. ~ Geez.
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