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Michael Anthony
Michael Anthony
Mar 18, 2024 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

A Long Way

She couldn't have been farther away.
Even though we were sleeping
here, next to each other.

Slow on the draw, to be sure,
it just took me some time
to get better at recognizing
what empty looked like.

And I understand now
just how far away far away can be
when it’s there in front of you.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

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Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski, Billy Collins, Ted Kooser, Haiku & Harvey Kurtzman (a visual poet, of sorts)

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Lavender

Lavender

1 year 4 months ago

A Long Way

Hello, Michael,
So many relationships are in "limbo." I recall not realizing what a positive, good relationship was until I was fortunate enough to have one. Like your poem suggests, it just took me awhile to acknowledge the emptiness.
Thank you,
L

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

1 year 4 months ago

Dear Michael,

this was my first marriage...the emptiness was gargantuan! I like your poem, it brought back echos....

*hug, Cat

William Lynn

William Lynn

1 year 4 months ago

Hello Michael.

Hello Michael.

A well written poem that strike way to close to home. Ah, what might have been if I could have seen the forest for the trees.

Thanks for sharing. - Will