Spectres release

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Spectres release" demonstrates a strong command of rhythm and rhyme, which contributes to its overall mood and tone. However, there are areas where clarity could be improved to enhance the reader's understanding and engagement.

Firstly, the poem could benefit from a more explicit exploration of the speaker's motivations. The first two lines introduce the speaker's desire to "speak with the dead", but the reasons behind this desire remain unclear. Providing more context could help the reader better connect with the speaker and understand the poem's themes.

Secondly, the phrase "incumbent to pass from this life into mirth" is somewhat ambiguous. The word 'incumbent' typically refers to a person currently holding office, which may not be the most fitting term in this context. Additionally, the transition from life to 'mirth' (meaning amusement or laughter) may not align with traditional conceptions of death, potentially causing confusion. If this is an intentional choice to subvert expectations, it may be helpful to provide more cues to guide the reader's interpretation.

Lastly, the poem's structure could be refined to enhance its flow. While the four-line stanzas generally work well, the two-line stanza ("The ghostly images, / of light down the hall") disrupts this pattern. Consider revising this stanza to maintain consistency, unless the disruption is intended for a specific effect.

Overall, the poem shows promise and with some revisions for clarity and consistency, it could be even more impactful.

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your title drew me in.
However, you kind of lost me at the end of the poem.
Incumbent to pass? Okay, I'll give you that one,
but from this life into [mirth]?

Maybe if they have been hanging around for a couple of centuries
they might be mirthful...
I guess the logic isn't quite what it should be, but with a little bit of work, it could be much better.
~ Geez.
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Hello, Leslie,
A conjuring of ghostly beings! It flows along nicely and the rhyme is smooth and clean. Maybe use something similar to "torment" instead of "tenure" to enhance the feeling of mirth? I enjoyed this!
Thank you!
L

my take on the poem is that the specter has earned the right to be pass through the veil and be reborn as a human baby. I think your poem has great karmic charm.

*hugs, Cat