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Apr 22, 2024
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Crystal Sky: Rare Twilight Sky Phenomenon
5 PM, November 17, 2078.
A celestial beautiful phenomenon
Many crystals appear in the sky
People call it Crystal Sky
The last time crystal sky was seen
And the last time we met
Unfortunetly i lost your number
Do you still remember me?
Do you still have my number?
If you do, why didn't you contact me?
I'm curious what you're doing now
Are you playing with your cat Tera now?
I wonder if you gone with Crystal Sky, Lucan...
You're going back to the Earth, right?
Can i see the crystal sky again with you?
I'm sorry because the sea miss the sky
About This Poem
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
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neopoet
1 year 2 months ago
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Lavender
1 year 2 months ago
Crystal Sky
Hello, Vender,
Welcome to Neopoet!
I am intrigued with this poem. I am curious about the specific future date and its significance, along with the names mentioned in the poem. This feels very both personal and supernatural. Will return to read your response!
Thank you!
Lavender
Vender
1 year 2 months ago
The year 2078 is intended to
The year 2078 is intended to provide a magical and mysterious vibe. Meanwhile, the names were only chosen randomly but i want to keep giving the impression of a strange future world. Anyway pardon me, i just answered your message, i didn't know anyone would be interested in commenting my poetry.
Lavender
1 year 2 months ago
Hello!
Again, an intriguing poem! I am curious about more of your work!
L
Vender
1 year 2 months ago
So i have participated in
So i have participated in several poetry writing competitions 5 times but only 1 poem won 1st place. With that feeling of disappointment, i was invited by the head of my study program to join to form a small company to make poetry to sell.