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May 03, 2024
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Romance
Romance
Seeking someone
Expressing emotion
Feeling excitement face to face
Intrigue
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
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neopoet
1 year 1 month ago
Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
This poem, titled "Romance", is a concise piece that attempts to capture the essence of romantic pursuit. The brevity of the poem, while making it accessible, also leaves room for further development and depth.
In terms of structure, the poem is a cinquain, a five-line poem that does not necessarily have to rhyme. This structure is well-executed, with each line adding a new layer to the concept of romance. However, the poem could benefit from more vivid and specific imagery. For instance, instead of the general term "seeking someone", the poet could use more specific language to convey the kind of person or relationship they are seeking.
The poem's language is simple and straightforward, which can be effective in certain contexts. However, in this case, it might benefit from more nuanced and evocative language. For example, instead of "feeling excitement face to face", the poet could explore more specific emotions or physical sensations associated with romantic excitement.
The theme of romance is a universal one, and the poem does a good job of presenting it in a concise manner. However, the poem could delve deeper into the complexities and nuances of romance to create a more compelling narrative. For example, it could explore the challenges, joys, or uncertainties that often accompany romantic pursuits.
In conclusion, while the poem's structure and theme are well-chosen, it could benefit from more specific imagery, nuanced language, and a deeper exploration of its theme.
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Mary Beth Magee
1 year 1 month ago
Beautiful visually…
…as well as in content. One of the charms of poetry is its ability to distill an idea to its essence. You have captured the essence of the pursuit of romance. Well done.
Clentin
1 year 1 month ago
Thank you. I will visit it
Thank you. I will visit it after I let it be for a while.
Thank you for reading and comments, well appreciated
Geezer
1 year 1 month ago
Yo Billy...
The contest is: Write a love poem without using the word love. ~ Geez.
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Clentin
1 year 1 month ago
Sorry. Poem is edited
Sorry. Poem is edited
Geezer
1 year 1 month ago
It's not as beautiful...
as the first one, but definitely within the parameters. ~ Geez.
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Clentin
1 year 1 month ago
Thank you. Romance is not
Thank you. Romance is not always beautiful.
Geezer
1 year 1 month ago
Depends...
on the eye of the beholder. ~ Geez.
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Clentin
1 year 1 month ago
Right on
Right on
RoseBlack
1 year 1 month ago
Short and sweet
Captured the essence of romance beautifully. Well done
Clentin
1 year 1 month ago
Thank you Rose, I appreciate
Thank you Rose, I appreciate your generous comments.