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May 29, 2024
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Written by Kelly Ann Wilson
I wake up in a cold sweat
From nightmares at night.
They called you the life of the party
While I couldn't even look
Another human being in the eye.
Every nerve in my body lights up
When people I love and trust
Casually brush by me.
It plays over like a record in my mind
The sound of glass breaking.
I taught myself
How to cover bruises with makeup.
Oh, but I won’t say your name
In public.
Written May 28, 2024
© 2024 Kelly Ann Wilson
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Read my writer’s blog at https://kwilsonarts.wordpress.com
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
tyro
1 year 1 month ago
it is written pretty casually
it is written pretty casually, with little description, but the pain and inner turmoil is reflected very well by key phrases. I hope this is an exercise and not real life.
Tyro
Geezer
1 year 1 month ago
I would rearrange a few of
I would rearrange a few of the lines, to make it seem more connected.
Such as:
They called you the life of the party,
I couldn't even look another human being in the eye.
Now, I wake up in a cold sweat
from nightmares in the dark.
Every nerve in my body lights up
when people I love and trust,
casually brush by me.
It plays over like a record in my mind...
the sound of glass breaking.
I taught myself
how to cover bruises with makeup
And... I won't say your name in public.
~ Geez.
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