When I say I love you

When I say I love you
It is more than just the word,
More than a weak definition,
More than short infatuation.

When I say I love you
It is more than just the word,
More than simply social dress,
Or choosing what suits me best.

When I say I love you
You must never let me go.
Never let me alone my love,
For I have no life without you.

You are more than my completion.
You are more!

It is not that I chose you-
Existence comes before

And if I lose you
Existence is no more

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: The Nederlands

Favorite Poets: William Butler Yates, Wallace Stevens, Giuseppe ungaretti, William Blake

Comments

neopoet

1 year ago

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Rula

1 year ago

these words would blow away any female.:)
She must be someone special to deserve such a piece of art
The closing lines are especially clever.
Thank you for sharing such enjoying and beautiful piece
Feeling a bit envious though wink wink.

Geezer

1 year ago

I truly agree...

with Rula, she has an eye for the romantic story, and you have certainly produced!
I'm not sure that there are many changes that could be made here. I am sure that you could use a different line in the second stanza, rather than: "It is more than just a word". Maybe you could say that it is "more than just a phrase". Nicely done, ~ Geezer.
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