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Patricia
Patricia
Jul 01, 2024 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
This poem is part of the challenge:

07/24 Falling For My Therapist

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Angel

I see you there glowing,

like an angel in a darkened sky,

gentle as I ever seen.

I bow my head before your eyes.

But alas, you are sleeping,

And your eyes are closed.

It’s just a figment of my imagination,

you were there you really were.

I see no sense in what you are.

To me you are the most wonderful creature,

and maybe you truly are an angel,

sent from God to guide me.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

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Country/Region: USA

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Alex Tanner

Alex Tanner

1 year ago

Hello

I liked this immensely, a nice soft read. A possible typo. Did you mean 'gentle' where you have 'gentile'? Alex.

Geezer

Geezer

1 year ago

I would choose...

to present this just a little differently, like so:

gentle as [I've] ever seen.

But your eyes are closed
you are sleeping.

comma: "you were there, you really were."

Nice stuff! ~ Geez.
.

Patricia

Patricia

1 year ago

Angel

Thank you for the critique and kind words.
Pat