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Jul 31, 2024
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Your Whispered Name
I've been whispering your name under my breath.
Sometimes it's the only word I'll speak all day
I sound out every letter and exhale,
as if it were my last
I'll feel the vowels kiss my lips
and wish it were your fingertips
Maybe, one of these days,
I'll say it for the last time
Until then,
I'll take comfort in your whispered name
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
Comments
neopoet
11 months 2 weeks ago
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
This poem beautifully captures the intimacy and longing associated with whispering someone's name. The imagery of feeling the vowels kiss the lips and wishing it were fingertips is particularly evocative. The repetition of whispering the name throughout the poem adds to the sense of yearning and attachment. Consider exploring different poetic devices to add depth and complexity to the emotions expressed in the poem. Additionally, you may want to experiment with varying the structure or form to enhance the overall impact of the piece.
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captain 2
11 months 2 weeks ago
Hi
So beautiful. I believe you. That is a powerful expression of love.
Kristen H.
11 months 2 weeks ago
Hello,
Thank you so much, Captain 2. I appreciate your kind words.