Peace Versus War (on the homefront)

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem effectively uses the metaphor of war to depict a domestic conflict, which provides a strong narrative structure and emotional resonance. However, the poem could benefit from a more consistent meter and rhyme scheme to enhance its musicality and flow.

The use of specific names towards the end of the poem ("Kathy and Coral") is a bit jarring, as it introduces a level of specificity that is not present in the rest of the poem. If these characters are integral to the narrative, consider introducing them earlier and developing them more fully.

The poem's perspective shifts between the first and third person, which can be confusing for the reader. It may be beneficial to maintain a consistent point of view throughout the poem.

The poem's language is generally clear and accessible, but there are moments where it becomes a bit vague or abstract ("getting at their worries and fears, was my special gift"). Consider revising these lines to make their meaning more explicit.

Lastly, the poem's punctuation is inconsistent, with some lines ending in commas, others in periods, and others with no punctuation at all. Standardizing the punctuation could improve the poem's readability.

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to deal with a domestic and familial situation, was not on my radar when I started this piece. I quickly realized that this was the case, with the lines: "Only prisoners she took were the kids." "He tried reasoning with her on every point". Very clever stuff!
I understand that the AI was a bit perplexed at the use of specific names; I think that it could have been useful to use less specific identities and maybe use [they, them, etc.]. True, a better use of punctuation may have made it more readable, but all in all, I got the message quite clearly. ~ Geez.
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