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Lavender
Lavender
Sep 15, 2024 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
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Along The Windy Shore

I remember you
and your lit-up smile
under the salty boardwalk.
You were seventeen
with your tousled hair
along the windy shore.

Such a time we had
'neath the summer sun
under the salty boardwalk.
With our hands entwined
we would race the waves
along the windy shore.

We never made promises
we couldn't keep.
No promises were broken.

So in the silver moonlight
there on the beach,
few words were ever spoken.

I remember soon
summer days grew short
under the salty boardwalk.
I was seventeen
when we said goodbye
along the windy shore.

Do you remember me
with my deep brown eyes
under the salty boardwalk?
Part of me remains
racing with the waves
along the windy shore.

I'm there along the shore.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: So long ago, I'm wondering if it ever really happened...

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: I tend to read Ted Kooser, Jim Harrison, Billy Collins, Paul Simon, Robert Frost. I like minimalist poetry, and poems reflecting on nature and Mother Earth.

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Rula

Rula

9 months 1 week ago

Dear Lavender

This sounds like someone fell in real love and would not sacrifice it, no matter what.
I remember at the age of seventeen when everything looked and coloured in pink, and tasted so sweet.
I, like you would wonder if this didn't happen though because it reads so real.
Very much enjoyed reading your poetry and this is so exquisite dear Lavender.

Lavender

Lavender

9 months 1 week ago

Hello, Rula,

It seems many of us have a memory similar to this from our young, naive lives.
Thank you for reading!
Lx

Words Ablaze

Words Ablaze

9 months 1 week ago

Ah young love, is there

Ah young love, is there anything more heart warming? Part of me remains somewhere too... Not a salty shore but a place in time more sweet than it was bitter. I really liked this. Too real, too personal to be just fiction or imagined. I liked most the last line... "I'm there along the shore"
Like you are still waiting, still hoping... Dickson was right... Fierce must be the storm that could abash that little bird!

Lavender

Lavender

9 months 1 week ago

Yes!

Young love, and sweet memories indeed! Lovely reference to Dickinson. So true.
Thank you!
L

Words Ablaze

Words Ablaze

9 months 1 week ago

Ah young love, is there

Ah young love, is there anything more heart warming? Part of me remains somewhere too... Not a salty shore but a place in time more sweet than it was bitter. I really liked this. Too real, too personal to be just fiction or imagined. I liked most the last line... "I'm there along the shore"
Like you are still waiting, still hoping... Dickson was right... Fierce must be the storm that could abash that little bird!

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

9 months 1 week ago

Dear Lavender,

I felt every word of this, and looked back at the trail behind me...

*hugs, Cat

Lavender

Lavender

9 months 1 week ago

Hello, Dear Cat,

Aw...maybe we've all had a summer like this one?
I always appreciate your comments!
Lx

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

9 months 1 week ago

yup!

actually I was sixteen and a half. I met him at the shores of Cedar Lake in the five lake district. It was an intense courtship and we married when I was eighteen he was twenty-three.

Rula

Rula

8 months 4 weeks ago

Dear Lavender

reading this again I thought the poem can more powerfully stand without that last line or perhaps replacing it with the repetitive " Do you remember"
Just a thought. You know, I have anyways much enjoyed reading it, again!

Lavender

Lavender

8 months 3 weeks ago

Hello, Rula,

Thank you for your lovely suggestion which I will think over, but mostly thank you for coming back to this with such thoughtfulness.
I appreciate you!
Lx

Wallyroo92

Wallyroo92

7 months ago

Along The Windy Shore

Gotta love those summer days filled with hope, romance and youth.

I think you captured a very real emotion that all of your readers find relatable and yet very unique to your experience. You painted a scene, a moving picture with words that brings back that excitement of love in our hearts.

Great work.