Exile

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The poem "Exile" explores the idea of longing for a single, perpetual emotion, specifically sadness. The speaker expresses a desire to banish all other emotions in favor of embracing sorrow indefinitely. The poem effectively conveys a sense of yearning for the comfort and familiarity of sadness, rejecting joy and love in the process.

One suggestion for improvement would be to further develop the imagery and sensory details to enhance the reader's emotional connection to the speaker's longing for exile in sadness. By incorporating vivid descriptions and engaging the senses, the poem could create a more immersive experience for the reader, deepening the impact of the central theme.

Additionally, consider refining the structure and flow of the poem to enhance its overall coherence and impact. Pay attention to the rhythm and meter of the lines to create a more consistent and engaging cadence throughout the piece. This attention to structure can help elevate the emotional resonance of the poem and strengthen its thematic exploration of exile in sadness.

Overall, "Exile" presents a compelling

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This is good enough to be published. It would look good as an opening to a book, even. I might be little biased because a similar situation came my way not long ago. "Would that I could." I love it. You're strong, decisive, and there is real suffering here of a kind that transcends the page, the way you write it. Love here is a paradox. You must fight to control a love you feel but isn't reciprocated or simply is too much. Full Disclosure: Words Ablaze and I are working on a book. Hey, hey.

In your explanation of the basis of this poem, you make a good argument. One thought for expressing the negative is, those feelings make for some wonderful poetry, because you have dug down deep! These are my favorite lines of your poem:

In all their glorious madness,
Nothing has ever been sweeter
Nothing ever kinder.
O, if only I could be sad forever

I very much like your structure and language usage!

*hugs, Cat

Hello, WA,
Your opening stanza, especially the first line, sets the mood for the entire poem. ("loose" instead of "lose.") Banish one, banish all - love the heedless feeling in this. "Commit my soul to sorrow. Make her master of me." Gives me the chills. Very nice!
Thank you,
L

Thank you for sharing.
I'm not sure that I agree with you. One shouldn't surrender to one mood or another. Life is a bit of this and that and all is worthy. However you have a point of view.
Always great to have your thoughts sharp and clear for us to share.
Good luck.

I love how this poem expresses how well acquainted to sadness we often become. It's so hard to chase happiness and joy when they are so fleeting. As one who has suffered devere depression most of her life, this one spoke to me. Well done!