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Sep 26, 2024
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Athena
Born of the gods in the Second Order
Inspiration world over, that defies all borders
Raised like art on the Sacred Rock
Wise with grey eyes that seduce or can shock
Aesthetic, poetic, majestic and proud
Honest but modest with headdress, no crown
Oversees all and she’s nobody’s fool
Builds bridges and breaks them, her mind is the tool
Riddled with rivals but none take her place
A shrine of Her’s built, sun shines on her face
Born of Metis and Zeus, in a pivotal time
Athena the grey, remains in her prime
About This Poem
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Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
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9 months ago
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Rula
9 months ago
Hello Anthony
What a high praise to Athens!
I thought you have blended methodology and artistic expressions effortlessly.
I found the line "Builds bridges and breaks them, her mind is the tool" as it reflects Athen's intellectual weapon in contrast to many other gods.
A special entry indeed!
Thank you for sharing.
Alex Tanner
9 months ago
Athena
I enjoyed this immensely, easy to read with good rhythm. Just needs some better,(I think) , punctuation. That is just nit picking. Well written. Alex