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Oct 14, 2024
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Disambiguation
When sinking in the mire
Water muddy with confusion
Meaning disappears into a black swamp
Redundant words drown in brain fog
Uncertain ground too soft to stand on
When you struggle with meaning
Look at a loved one’s face
Study their facial muscles
Lips pursed, the nose upturned
The eyes have it,
The smile knows it.
Don’t look for a clear explanation
Instead try anti disambiguation
And if you know what that means
Then climb a mountain of baked beans
All those 57 varieties,
Each one the same bloody bean!
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
neopoet
8 months 2 weeks ago
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
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Lavender
8 months 2 weeks ago
Disambiguation
Hello, Sen!
The fact that AI cannot feasibly understand your poem adds a lovely irony to your theme! (A big grin here.) Every line is thought-provoking and engaging. This is both serious in depth, and fun in its carefree manner. "The eyes have it, the smile knows it..." So true. I think I'd leave off punctuation entirely and let the lines flow with open ends - let the reader visit a bit with each thought. Great theme, and creative ending.
Thank you!
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Sen99
8 months 2 weeks ago
Thank You Lavender
I appreciate your reading and analysis, I don't think AI is built for irony or anything with humour ! i agree better to let the free verse without punctuation, I'm glad you could see the struggle with meaning and the comic ending as well/.
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Rula
8 months 1 week ago
Hello sen
A well -take of the theme. Great use of metaphor in especially in the 1st stanza which is my favorite though I like it all.
Best wishes!
Sen99
8 months 1 week ago
Hello Rula
Good to hear from you, I'm glad the theme appealed to you, thanks for reading and commenting !
Sen99
8 months 1 week ago
Hello Rula
Good to hear from you, I'm glad the theme appealed to you, thanks for reading and commenting !