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The Yellow bird

I saw the yellow bird from a distance.l questioned her existance,I gave her a meaning then I questioned until I came to the conclusion that she was just there to be beautiful and seen.If she has ever seen her self through the mirror then I am definitely sure she knows of her beauty,she knows that the colour of her wings are unique and carefully painted with love and adoration.The yellow bird knows about her creator because his signature is all over her wings .When other birds try and discredit her beauty she always remembers to look into the mirror and also remembers the mood in which her creator was when he created her.The yellow bird knows that the criticism from other birds never stop so she carries a mirror everywhere she goes.The yellow bird is not so different from me,the yellow bird represents the beauty and the ugliness of life and how we chose to walk through it

About This Poem

Last Few Words: This poem is to be read by anyone but also more specific to people of religion (christianity)

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Country/Region: South Africa

Comments

neopoet

8 months 1 week ago

Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Your poem "The Yellow Bird" beautifully captures the theme of self-perception and inner beauty through the metaphor of the yellow bird. The imagery of the bird carrying a mirror everywhere she goes to remind herself of her unique beauty is powerful and thought-provoking.

One suggestion for improvement would be to consider varying the structure of your poem to create more rhythm and flow. You could experiment with different line lengths or stanza breaks to enhance the overall impact of your message. Additionally, paying attention to punctuation and grammar could help clarify the meaning and make the poem more polished.

Overall, your poem effectively conveys a deeper message about self-acceptance and resilience in the face of criticism. Keep refining your craft and exploring different poetic techniques to further enhance your work.

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