Insanity Let Free

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem presents a clear narrative and uses vivid imagery to convey its message. However, the poem could benefit from a more consistent use of metaphor and a more precise use of language.

The metaphor of the asylum is a powerful one, suggesting a world turned upside-down where the inmates are running the institution. However, this metaphor is not consistently maintained throughout the poem. For example, the stanza about the car and the government seems to shift away from the asylum metaphor without a clear transition, which could potentially confuse the reader. It might be beneficial to revise this section to more clearly tie it back to the central metaphor.

The language of the poem is generally clear and direct, but there are a few places where it could be more precise. For example, the phrase "sell madness in exchange for our peace" is a bit vague. What exactly does it mean to "sell madness"? How is peace being exchanged? Clarifying these points could make the poem's message more impactful.

The poem's ending is strong, offering a clear call to action for the reader. However, the phrase "start speaking sense" is somewhat ambiguous. It might be more effective to specify what kind of sense the speaker wants the reader to start speaking, or what actions they should take to "revive the world".

Overall, this poem has a strong concept and a clear message, but could benefit from a more consistent use of metaphor and more precise language.

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I think you have the right of it... the inmates are running the Asylum!

*hugs, Cat

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Did you mean to say - then click cancel and apply ??
You should look at those lines again my friend it's kinda confusin to my simpy mind.

Later Bro,
Mark