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The Orchard of Choices
In the orchard of choices, where branches extend,
Each apple a decision, a path without end.
Some gleam like the morning, tempting and bright,
While others hang heavy, shrouded in night.
With fingers outstretched, I wander the rows,
Sifting through options, where uncertainty grows.
A crisp red allure, promising sweet taste,
Yet caution whispers, “Don’t rush; don’t waste.”
Beneath the green canopy, shadows entwine,
The weight of each choice, a burden divine.
Do I reach for the fruit that glistens with pride,
Or pause at the ones that humility hide?
Some apples are flawless, their surface a dream,
But inside they’re hollow, or bursting at the seam.
Others, though bruised, hold a wisdom untold,
Lessons wrapped gently in skins worn and old.
With each chosen apple, a path starts to form,
A journey unfolding, both chaotic and warm.
For life is an orchard, vast and unplanned,
Where choices like fruits are plucked from the hand.
So I gather my harvest, both bitter and sweet,
Embracing the journey, no matter the feat.
In the orchard of choices, I learn to believe,
That each fruit has its story, and I am the weave.
In ripened reflection, I stand here today,
Grateful for moments that led me this way.
For every decision has brought me to see,
The beauty in choices, and the power in me.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Trust in your ability to navigate this vast orchard,knowing that every choice you make brings you one step closer to your true self.
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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Shantie Moyo
8 months 1 week ago
Thank you for the opportunity
Thank you for the opportunity to share my work.The poem was inspired by my reflections on choices and the journey of self-discovery.I aimed to explore the idea tha every choice we make shapes our i identity and path in life.I would love to hear your thoughts and interpretations.
Sen99
8 months 1 week ago
Hello Shantie
Enjoyed the fruit metaphor, the theme was good and logically developed throughout the poem. You have made wise choices in life. I guess I went for the forbidden fruit instead !
Shantie Moyo
6 months 2 weeks ago
Thank you so much
Thank you so much
Geezer
8 months 1 week ago
Nice stuff! Not many people
Nice stuff! Not many people can write compound sentences as poetry.
You show a good deal of care in making the lines meet the proper meter, and where they don't, it is barely noticeable. You have kept to a 10-11 beat, which is a delight to read. Your language is good, simple and clear. I took this piece to be about friendships and relationships that become pivotable points in your life. Well done. My advice, is to read whatever poets "Turn you on", look at different styles and flavors, we have many, and I think that you should taste them all. Of course, there are those that will not appeal to you and will not be made a meal of, but there are so many to sample that you will not starve, for sure. Welcome to Neo.
~ Geezer.
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Shantie Moyo
6 months 2 weeks ago
Thank you and sorry for the
Thank you and sorry for the late reply
Love.
Leslie
8 months 1 week ago
The Orchard of Choices
This was a beautifil one. I loved the exploration of choice. The representation of apples as people has left me wanting to read more! I look forward to reading future poems.
Shantie Moyo
8 months 1 week ago
Thank yu
Thank yu
Shantie Moyo
6 months 2 weeks ago
Thank you
Thank you