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Oct 20, 2024
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Breaths of Air
Along my favorite path by the water
I imagine I hear whispers in the breeze.
Diamonds on the water, reflecting an incandescent sun,
have things to say too; echoing the wind.
The words, not intending melancholy,
talk over each other, anxious to have my attention.
And have it they will. This chorus of voices
I miss the most, hailing me when the wind speaks.
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Lavender
9 months ago
Breaths of Air
Hello, Michael,
I love these tender moments when nature connects us to our most authentic selves. Everything - who we've been, who we are now and the people, places and events that brought us to this point. Nature offers no BS, but there is some peace in that, too. I can understand why this is your favorite path.
Thank you!
L