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Hallow light

bond once strong, now grows old
Deceit seeps in like winter's night
Leaving scars, and a hollow light

A month is all it took,
And yet I've fallen in the deep ends.
Never did I suspect that the rain
Would shower me with ice,
And thee with sand.
Losing hope is near the shrine.

In eyes that once held warmth and light,
A frost has settled, dark and tight.
The echoes of our laughter fade,
As trust, like autumn leaves, is laid
To wither, lost, and unreclaimed.

None to trust but a comrade,
None to accept advice from but a dear friend.
Shiver is foe, but deceit,
A friend of mine in mind laid.
Perfection I did not expect,
Compromising was on the finale and grand.

Yet, in shadows, truth awaits,
A silent witness to heartbreak's weight.
Amidst the shards of shattered dreams,
A glimmer of self-love beams,
A beacon to guide me through the night.

- Jay(purple)

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

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Country/Region: South Africa

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Comments

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

8 months 1 week ago

Hello Jay Purple,

I see that you are very new to Neopoet! Welcome to the site. The poem sets the hook with the very first line.... It is a haunting experience to read! my favorite lines are:

bond once strong, now grows old
Deceit seeps in like winter's night
Leaving scars, and a hollow light

I am hoping to read more from you.
*hugs, Cat