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Leslie
Leslie
Nov 07, 2024 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Escapade in the nude!

I ran up the pier in the nude
with a delinquent attitude.
Whipped it out just to whittle
on sunday afternoon!

Then lept off of the end,
with my back to the wind.
In front of an old
fishing boat crew.

The hands on the boat
had not a clue.
They called for the
beach patrol too!

I capsized their dingy,
with a clumbsy leap.
I swam to the shore
and left without any adieu!

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Just something funny to read! What the heck, you only live once.

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Ogden, Utah, USA

Favorite Poets: Jon Anderson, Jon Ondrasik, Donald Fagen, Sting, Eric Bloom , and all of the poets at neo.

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Comments

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

8 months ago

Dear John,

how naughty of you, LOL! but seriously, the third verse could use some work.

love, Cat

RoseBlack

RoseBlack

8 months ago

This made me laugh

The imagery was great, but I feel like the fourth verse may have something missing...like how did you capsize their boat? Was it from the shock of seeing a nude person jumping into the water or did you land on their boat?

Leslie

Leslie

8 months ago

Cat & Rose

Thanks for dropping by this really was a fluke. I worked on it with both of your suggestions. I hope that you like the new version too.

Leslie

Leslie

8 months ago

Cat & Rose

Thank you both ever so much, it don't get as many comments as I would like!

Alex Tanner

Alex Tanner

8 months ago

HeHe

Very amusing. Loved the first verse. Its the first time I've heard it called "Whittling". Alex