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Nov 11, 2024
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A Journey toward Salvation
Fueled by the love of exploration
We steer the wheel of pride.
No breaks, no fear, no hesitation.
The journey is a benevolent ride.
The vehicle's not too big, nor small
Sized just right to fit our dreams,
Satisfying to carry and haul
to new realms and extended streams.
Now heading to our destination.
Among Palestine's holy lands.
The sanctities are our salvation
Each monument, a culture's stand.
The mosques, the churches everywhere
Each has a history of its own
Each grain of sand a mighty prayer
Each little stone a holy throne.
There we cleanse the tiresome spirit
To shed our sins and doubts
Peace in hearts we hold; inherit
Today's seeds will bloom as sprouts.
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Candlewitch
8 months 1 week ago
Dearest Rula,
I love it all. I found it simple to understand because of your straight forward word choices. it is beautiful because you are a lovely poet and person. you have laid down the recipe for an honest trail to salvation. my favorite lines, tho hard to choose, are:
There we cleanse the tiresome spirit
To shed our sins and doubts
Peace in hearts we hold; inherit
Today's seeds will bloom as sprouts.
much love, your Candle
Rula
8 months 1 week ago
Dear Candle
Your kind words make me blush.
I'm thankful and honored to have your friendship among those in Neopoet's.
Your visit and words mean a lot!
Lavender
8 months 1 week ago
A Journey Toward Salvation
Hello, Rula,
The hope for a journey filled with the integrity and dignity that we all deserve.
Thank you, My Friend.
Lxxx
Rula
8 months 1 week ago
Dearest Lavender
I hope one day to accompany my friends in Neopoet and take this ride away from the filthy life.
And yes, we surely deserve it.
Thank you for your kind words.
Geezer
8 months 1 week ago
It is...
my greatest wish that you and all of the people of Palestine have peace and a place of your own to call home. You have told the story of reaching for the prize, I do have some hope that you will obtain it. Many fond regards, ~ Geez.
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Rula
8 months 1 week ago
Sir Gee
I will never lose the hope. Well, I admit that some are working more than others to Regain that Home, but in one way or another we all do
Your thoughts are always appreciated!
Leslie
7 months 4 weeks ago
Rula
I read this and felt your deep feelings for your people and your holy lands. Along with the others I hold prayers and wishes that you might recieve the things that you desire. I especially liked the last two lines of the 4th stanza a message of hope for both you and me. Great poem as always. Thanks for the read! John
Leslie
7 months 4 weeks ago
Rula
I read this and felt your deep feelings for your people and your holy lands. Along with the others I hold prayers and wishes that you might recieve the things that you desire. I especially liked the last two lines of the 4th stanza a message of hope for both you and me. Great poem as always. Thanks for the read! John
Rula
7 months 3 weeks ago
Hello sir
Sorry for the belated reply
Your wishes are much appreciated and highly valued.
I can't thank you enough for your kind visit
Leslie
7 months 2 weeks ago
Rula
I know that you believe in God. My only question being is "what sins"? It all for the experience to me. Just one holy and unholy ride. Just my pov! Great clean and pristine write!
Rula
7 months 2 weeks ago
Sins
anything and everything we commit against Allah's commands/
what we do though God forbids.