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Nov 20, 2024
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The teeth chattering buzzword, Gaza.
Xylophonic's zephyr zealous cynism Zen,
zoomed in zainey Zenith of zigzagged xeroxed,
zeitgeist Zion guise of zoning zodiacs Zulufied by
exotic exorbitant Zealots mosaic tzitzit sizzling the mezzanine izm zinc.
Bedazzled by desire embezzling the reason that
risen to resonate this resilient raisin blazed by this...
Brazen raising ray zeal, razzled by razzmatazz rizz
that reserved resident resumed rèsumè rinsed,
Zipped and zapped by exhuming Zeus's zombied
zeppelin dozing oxidized zore exhibiting puzzling
Ooze of Tzar blizzard frazzled freezing frizzling
fuzziness fazed by displeasing Zaleplonic zucchini musing muzzled Nazarethian stanza jazzed.
Gauze guzzling orgasmic Godzilllian gorgonized jasmine Jezebels, jizzed on Gza's and Rza's resultant whizzing wiz, as Zeuxippe zingered jeez whiz energized the gize
while Jesus gaized through hazey Gaza sized fallen OZ.
By: Fortune Motsabi
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
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Editing Stage: Not actively editing
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7 months 1 week ago
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The poem "The teeth chattering buzzword, Gaza" exhibits an impressive command of alliteration and internal rhyme, which contribute to a unique rhythm and flow. The use of unusual and complex words adds a layer of depth and intrigue to the piece. However, this complexity can also pose a challenge for readers, as the meaning of the poem may be obscured by the dense language and abstract imagery.
The poem could benefit from a clearer thematic or narrative thread to guide the reader through its rich linguistic landscape. As it stands, the poem seems to jump from one idea to the next without a clear connection, making it difficult for the reader to follow and engage with the piece.
The use of 'z' and 'x' words is a notable feature of this poem. While this adds a unique element to the piece, it can also make the poem feel somewhat forced or contrived. It may be beneficial to focus on using these words in a way that enhances the meaning and coherence of the poem, rather than using them for their rarity.
The final stanza introduces several new ideas and images, which can be confusing for the reader. It may be beneficial to revisit this stanza and consider how it can be revised to better align with the rest of the poem.
Overall, this poem demonstrates a strong command of language and a unique poetic voice. With some revisions to enhance clarity and coherence, it has the potential to be a powerful piece.
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Headless Two F…
7 months 1 week ago
The teeth chattering buzzword, Gaza.
With this poem I devised a strategy to talk about politics without talking about politics. The most important part of this poem, is the title. "The teeth chattering buzzword, Gaza".
I invited the confusion from the onset in this poem, not just to merely confuse but to envoug hidden and suppressed emotion as well. The title is created to draw the reader in, and the confusion creates a blank canvas, wherein the reader paints the portrait of the poem according to their true colors. What this means is that, the words are secondary in this poem, the reader's feelings about the subject are what determines the meaning of the poem, therefore, if you feel anything at all about the Gaza situation, you'll understand the poem as according to your stance without having your mind persuaded in any way.
The alliteration and assonances of the word sounding "z", are employed to carry a vibration and ramshock of wheezing missiles, wheezing bullets passing by and occasionally bomb drops.
The symbolism within the poem is created to guide the reader through the poem, notwithstanding the fact that the poem can only be put into full context by reading the title of the poem first.
The usage of the word "Zietgiest" is a synecdoche to refer to an alleged conspiracy behind the existence of the war on either side, the "Zion guise" is a metaphor and a synecdoche that is intentionally devised to nod at the conspiracy that's been thrown around currently and the employing of the word "Zulufied", is a political synecdoche of referring to South Africa taking the Israel government to the International Court of Justice over this same war.
The poet doesn't seek to take a stance or recruit with this poem, the overall meaning of the poem can only be determined and understood in accord with each readers original stance. The poem is underlined to be misunderstood and have the reader sometimes feel like they do not know what's going on because that's how the unfolding events, as regards the Gaza situation seems to the poet.
The usage of contemporary jargon and modern influential names is just the way to initial to the reader of any age or era when the poem was written.
The last stanza, is where the poet attempts to take a strong stance, again without trying to sway the reader on thier side.
The title as aforementioned is the most important part, the title is created to encoax emotions and opinions the reader usually has already, when they hear the word "Gaza" or see the flag, whether on social media, the news or wherever it may come up in any conversation.