To The Great Poem I May One Day Compose

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem exhibits a strong sense of anticipation and reverence towards the creative process, which is commendable. However, there are areas where the poem could be improved.

1. Consistency: The poem seems to oscillate between formal and informal language. For instance, "I know you’re lingering around somewhere close" has a casual tone, while "I will craft you like the most reverent piece of art" is more formal. Consistency in tone can help maintain the reader's immersion.

2. Imagery: While the poem does contain some imagery, it could benefit from more vivid and specific descriptions. For example, instead of saying "a lifetime of memories begs the call", you could describe specific memories or experiences that contribute to the creation of the poem.

3. Rhythm and Meter: The rhythm of the poem is somewhat inconsistent, which can disrupt the flow for the reader. For example, the lines "And once your inspiration comes to my heart" and "I will recite them in free verse from my deathbed instead" have different numbers of syllables, which can make the poem feel disjointed.

4. Show, Don't Tell: The poem often tells the reader what is happening, rather than showing it. For example, "You won’t reveal yourself until the time is right" tells the reader about the poem's reluctance to reveal itself. Instead, you could show this reluctance through a metaphor or simile.

5. Word Choice: The choice of words in some areas could be improved. For instance, "reverent piece of art" is somewhat clichéd. Try to find fresh and original ways to express your ideas.

Overall, the poem has potential, but could benefit from more attention to detail in terms of language, imagery, and rhythm.

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I'm thinking that you have given this a lot of thought. Of course, if you keep this all in your head, you may advance, rearrange and in general make what you will whenever you want. I wish that I might do that, but unfortunately, many factors such as
concussions, and past use of nefarious substances have rendered my short-term memories a moot point. Thank you for a look at the mind of someone who may someday achieve the "Great Poem". ~ Geezer.
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Well written, and intersting capture of what, perhaps, many of who write may feel about our poetry. Enjoyed this - thank you!

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Hello, W,
I raise my glass to this! Here's to success for you... and for all poets!
Well said, and well written!
Thank you,
L

It is out there, the inspiration of your muse...perhaps waiting for when you least expect it. Nice work.

hugs, and holiday cheer, Cat

You're on the right track. You've already composed one.
I absolutely love it!