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Nov 24, 2024
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Bouncing In the Void
It came back bouncing,
like a greedy ball—
a cheque I badly needed ,
now worth nothing at all.
“There’s no sufficient funds,”
eventually, they’d say.
“Try again later—
maybe another day.”
Or perhaps next month,
as if money might spring.
Who really knows
what tomorrow might bring?
This is no joke,
but the worst nightmare.
It might never be cashed,
never to be declared.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Trying my hand with this title with some sense of humor. I admit it's not my best, but wanted to give it a go!
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Lavender
7 months 3 weeks ago
Bouncing in the Void
Hello, Rula!
This is wonderful! A happy sense of humor, and it flows so easily!
Really enjoyed this and its clever title!
Thank you!
L
Rula
7 months 3 weeks ago
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Rula
7 months 3 weeks ago
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Rula
7 months 3 weeks ago
Thank you dear
I wasn't sure if the sense of humor bit worked well.
Thank you for assuring that.
The whole thing was out of my comfort zone.
Always great to hear from my dear friends ^_^
Much appreciate it
Candlewitch
7 months 3 weeks ago
Dear Rula,
It might not be your be among your best, but it is better than I could do, considering the subject matter. Good luck on the contest, my sweet friend!
your, Candle
Rula
7 months 3 weeks ago
Dearest Candle
Much appreciate your kind wishes and all the support!
Always appreciate it.
Leslie
7 months ago
Rula
Another wonderful poem. I'm sorry I see no humor. I wish that you were somewhere safe with all you need and desire!
Rula
6 months 4 weeks ago
Dear Leslie
Thank you for reading and leaving such a comment.
Always appreciate it.
All is good, please take good care of yourself.