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Nov 26, 2024
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Transcendental hope!
We wander through our life.
seeking resolution.
Not knowing what will
happen next.
The answer lies within.
It's not about the Gods
we serve our destiny in hand.
We work our way along lifes path
and try to comprehend.
Pretending to be something
wer'e really not.
Don't try too hard
don't run to fast.
This game will have an end.
It may not be what others want
it's our life in the end.
Don't give up hope
Oh can't you see
the glory which extends.
Some seek for gold,
some seek for pleasure.
For me I seek a freind
To walk beside in this chaos
If you'll sit still
just long enough.
It's beauty will transend
into a bold and brave new world.
Which never has to end!
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I'm not looking for any help, just to find a freind. A timely resolution there at the glorious end!
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Rula
7 months 1 week ago
Your words
Always rang true dear friend,
We're all here to listen to your words of wisdom and whatever you want to say.
Your line. "don't run to(o) fast" missed an o
Great poetry!
Thank you for sharing.