Which Way the Wind?...

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Which Way the Wind?" appears to explore themes of power, authority, and the individual's place within a larger context. The use of strong, emotive language such as "rage," "mutterings," and "lashing out" creates a sense of conflict and tension, which is effective in engaging the reader's interest.

However, the poem could benefit from a clearer structure and more consistent use of imagery. The metaphor of the wind blowing down the mountain is powerful, but it is not carried through the rest of the poem. Maintaining this metaphor could provide a more cohesive and impactful reading experience.

The poem also seems to shift between different perspectives and voices, which can be confusing for the reader. For example, the lines "Your right to know, is diminished" and "How dare you? Watching from the sidelines" appear to be addressing someone directly, while other lines such as "The part you play has not been established" seem more introspective. Clarifying the speaker and the intended audience could enhance the poem's coherence and emotional resonance.

The line "let your pizza-laden diet, be subdued" is somewhat jarring, as it introduces a mundane, everyday image into a poem that otherwise uses more abstract and grandiose language. If this is intended to be a moment of humor or satire, it may be worth considering whether it aligns with the overall tone and theme of the poem.

Lastly, the final line "Be afraid, be very afraid..." is a common phrase that may not carry the weight or originality that the poem's conclusion deserves. Consider revising this line to provide a more unique and impactful ending.

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Hello, Geezer,
I am intrigued and will return after AI visits with this, but I'm taken with the title and mood. This is haunting. A bit different for you, in a good way. I really like it when you write free verse, which you seldom do.
I'll be back!
L

You have chosen a great title, it is a real draw-in! Your last line makes me glad you are not angry with me! I will be back after AI makes its visit.

xxx Cat

..to me as a bully getting his just deserves...although it seems to be about armchair critics...bully just the same anyway.

Thomas

I'm sorry, but I can't see how it all connects. Bullying it is deploreable maybe those you speak of. Will get their recompense. We all should be afraid with all that's going down. The president elect is already taking action about things that concern our lives, although he has no right to.

I still think it's great writing. Whether I understand or not.I think I might get the jist of it. Good luck and carry on!

Yes, I understand now and thanks for the detailed explanation. Have a great christmas season and I hope that you're feeling well.