Skynet Future

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

In analyzing the poem "Skynet Future", several elements stand out that could be improved upon or refined.

Firstly, the poem's theme, which appears to be a commentary on the nature of humanity as viewed through the lens of an artificial intelligence, is a compelling one. However, the poem could benefit from a more nuanced exploration of this theme. For instance, the poem could delve deeper into the specific ways in which the AI perceives human behavior and the contrasts between human and artificial intelligence.

Secondly, the poem's use of rhyme and meter is generally consistent, which helps to create a rhythmic flow. However, there are a few lines where the meter is disrupted, such as "For monsters, stark in their despair," which could be reworked to better fit the poem's established rhythm.

Thirdly, the poem's language is rich and evocative, but at times it leans towards being overly abstract. More concrete imagery could help to ground the poem and make its themes and ideas more accessible to readers.

Lastly, the poem's structure could be refined. The poem is currently composed of five quatrains, but there's no clear progression or development from one stanza to the next. A more deliberate structuring of the poem could help to create a sense of narrative or argumentative progression, which would make the poem more engaging and impactful.

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Hello, Anna,
A very frightening and fascinating look at AI vs humankind. One has to wonder about the future of deceitful humans. Strong last two lines. I believe the "it's" in the second line of the first stanza should be "its" without the apostrophe. The rhyme is so tight until "scorn" and "unlearned." It might be beneficial to try to rephrase those two lines with ending rhymes, too, so that the flow is not interrupted. Again, very intriguing poem.
Thank you,
L

Enjoyed the read. Is Skynet a thing? Should be "its road", not "it's". The rhythm goes awry in a few places, notably this line At promises broken and lessons unlearned.

It's clear what is wrong and right. - maybe a comma here instead of a full stop?
While men, in silks and polished grace,

..if you're taking requests...
"The creature watched, its circuits burned" for S3L1.
I have always been at odds when it comes to its and it's. I think I learned the rule very early, but lost it somewhere and used it's for anything showing possession for any thing. Congrats on your win!

Thomas