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Dec 18, 2024
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Father
I kept trying to traverse a chasm before me,
seeking a presence I longed for, but never offered
on a barren range dotted by clouds in the distance.
It took me some time to realize
there were distances that couldn’t be reached
by trying to get there.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
mark
7 months ago
Mike so well put
Nothing to add except a real beauty.
Mark
Michael Anthony
7 months ago
Always appreciate your
Always appreciate your comments Mark - thank you.
Best
Ruby Lord
7 months ago
Powerful
I've read this a few times now. Your words, every one making this count. I think this is perfect as it is. You should be very pleased with this. Ruby xxx :)
Michael Anthony
7 months ago
Thank you RL. Appreciate the
Thank you RL. Appreciate the visit and your thoughts on this piece - very kind.
Best
Lavender
7 months ago
Father
Hello, Michael,
I agree - perfect.
Thank you,
L